tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post8358037926405564713..comments2023-10-29T07:38:25.469-07:00Comments on Bret Blog: WRITING: "Imp" (excerpt)Bret Carterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07358057018626638406noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post-33177846250900097932008-07-27T13:06:00.000-07:002008-07-27T13:06:00.000-07:00I think the structure of the journal excepts will ...I think the structure of the journal excepts will flow easier once we read more of the whole work. Reminds me of Willis. I like to make the reader work. They end up enjoying it more.Abbiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10735445176081902231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post-13479534042404838662008-07-23T14:51:00.000-07:002008-07-23T14:51:00.000-07:00It is definitely a cool idea, but I found the plac...It is definitely a cool idea, but I found the placement a little jarring. A very tiny issue with an awesome start to a story...Brenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00830801737968862980noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post-42995885925210821302008-07-15T12:37:00.000-07:002008-07-15T12:37:00.000-07:00Thanks for reading this. The middle part is Griggs...Thanks for reading this. The middle part is Griggs, but it's from a journal that he is keeping. For now, I won't say any more. <BR/>And thanks for the warning concerning the obx.Bret Carterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07358057018626638406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post-66536046995604993312008-07-15T12:14:00.000-07:002008-07-15T12:14:00.000-07:00You kill me! You always get things started so well...You kill me! You always get things started so well - give me more!!!!<BR/><BR/>I had the same question as Brent, by the way, but maybe that would be cleared up with more of the story. <BR/><BR/>Love your imagery!<BR/><BR/>"obxvhvu" - a polite way of mentioning the breaking of wind of the obx (this is the word verification for the comment).The Raabshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15782726273235890454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4742468650477322757.post-92207701516273979952008-07-14T10:27:00.000-07:002008-07-14T10:27:00.000-07:00Whoops, I posted this comment in the wrong spot. S...Whoops, I posted this comment in the wrong spot. Sorry.<BR/><BR/>Very interesting beginning--I'm anxious to read more. As always, you paint a vivid scene for the readers with fantastic detail and simile. My favorite is "like a gladiator matched against Frosty the snowman". What a great way to say that Griggs had to be confident in triumph even if he was scared.<BR/><BR/>Question: is the middle Brenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00830801737968862980noreply@blogger.com